Alcohol on college campuses has become a hazard to the education of the nation’s youth, with two recent deaths, one at LSU and one at MIT, both dying from alcohol poisoning.
Just this past weekend, three students from the Alpha Beta Zeta fraternity were admitted to the local hospital for alcohol poisoning after attending a party at the ABZ house, according to the university’s public relations office.
The three students taken to the hospital were: Press Martin, a junior; Al Amalek, a freshman and Rob Smith, a sophomore. Martin and Smith were released from the hospital on Monday, while Amalek is still there listed in critical condition.
University president Harvey Smithville had previously restated the policy banning alcohol from fraternity houses on campus or within campus environs.
“Any fraternity in which the members have alcohol will be immediately suspended,” said Smithville. “A second offense within a year will result in the banning of that fraternity for five years.”
Due to this policy and evidence gathered by an investigation of the fraternity by the University, president Smithville has decided to suspend the fraternity and all its activities on campus.
Interfraternity Council president Bart Addison who agreed with president Smithville and supported the policy is calling for leniency.
“I do not believe the entire fraternity should be held responsible for the actions of a few,” said Addison. “I am going to ask President Smithville to reconsider his suspension of the ABZs.”
Your lead is a little newsier, but it is still not the most important detail. Do students at this college (let’s say it is GMU) care more about random dudes dying in Boston and Baton Rouge, or about three people they might be friends with in the hospital in Fairfax?
Also: the suspension of the frat is big news, and should not be buried so low.
Your writing is okay, with some awkwardness, but on the midterm, think hard about what is news and what is filler.